Jayden+V.'s+Introduction+and+Goals



=== ﻿Do you want to know about me? If you do, keep reading. If you do not, keep reading. Moving on, I will start with my family. I am half Asian, half American, like my sister. My name is Jayden and I am ten. You can also call me J-boy or Ninjay. My mom, Lauri, is 38, she is American, and has been married to my dad for 11 years. My dad's name is Noel is also 38, and he is half philipino, half Chinese. Last, my sister is Sage, and she is six. Now I only have two cousins in America on my mom's side and they are not easy to get along with...Next, my hobbies. === === My hobbies are riding my red Falcon Schwinn bike, playing soccer and basketball, reading big books, and running. I like riding my bike at my house. Now for soccer and basketball. I play soccer on a team at Huntsinger park and my team name is galaxy. Basketball, however, is different. I am not on a team and I just plar for fun at my neighbors' house and my grandma's park. Last for this paragraph, I like to run from my mailbox to my house. To be read soon, info about my friends. === === My best friends are William, Rodolfo, Nico,and John (he doesn't go to this school). If I had to pick one friend for the rest of my life, I'd choose William because he's been my friend the longest, which is four years and he is my best friend. If I couldn't pick him I would pick down the list, since I ordered them. If I couldn't pick anyone from the list, I'd pick my cousin Lovely, (and we get along as well as I get along with William, who is sitting next to me at this very moment), who is older than me, but I'm still taller!? Coming up next, my school life. Which, by the way, is going great! So, enjoy! === === I am in fifth grade going to Saticoy in Mr. Wulff's and Mrs. Geib's class. Just so you know, Mr.Wulff and Mrs. Geib are both really great artists, and if I want to be as good as them, I will have to go through numerous years of practicing. Something strange is that I will most likely do something while doing it. My writing is not at all great, so I must practice a lot, which is how I'll improve. One amazing thing is that my teachers got pets, like fish, bearded dragons, and snakes for our class! The King snake's name is Precious, the bearded dragon's name is Smog, and the male's is Matchus, who eats crickets as fast as I eat Kampai's ( a japanese restaraunt) delicous shrimp and rice>(: (which is a lot!). One time, I saw Matchus practicing his skills for Smog, then after a while, He started bobbing his head up and down, and I saw Smog waving her hand as if they could see through the clipboards like Mr. Wulff said (not see through).Then another day I saw Matchus doing the same thing to Precious, which is weird because she's a snake! At long last, my personal goals (YAY!). === === A goal I would like to complete now is complete this All About Me Essay. In the future I would like to be an author who writes fourth through sixth grade books. The type of book I might make is mythology. Lastly I would love to win the school spelling bee, which I hope will be easy since I’ve been in every one I could be in (third grade). The word I missed in third grade was poinsettia only the because the principal said pointsettia. All right, I'll tell you. The word I missed in fourth grade is coffee, spelled cofee! I guess that's what I get for studying the wrong packet! Lastly, my academic goals. ===

=== The college I would like to go to if affordable is Harvard,but to do that, I will have to improve my writing more than significantly. I'm not sure I'll be able to afford it, but, as Mrs. Geib reminded me, they have scholarships. Ooh, by the way, I found out where I got my brains from. My mom (of course) and my cousin Earvin, who was last year's valedictorian (he's a lot older than me) (wow!). I hope you enjoyed my all about me, actually I really hope you enjoyed my all about me. and I will be done right about.............now! P.S. Sorry about the drawing. I freak out on sight too. Sorry about the chang in color and I will finish a goal after this word> yay! ===

**Reader Feedback** Jayden, your essay is FANTASTIC! I really feel like I have learned a lot about you. Could you please separate your ideas into paragraphs and tell me how you are going to improve your writing? How can you achieve that goal? Also, what are some of your hobbies? Lastly, don't worry about affording Harvard just yet, they do have scholarships..Great job! --Mrs. Geib

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I enjoyed your personal examples and how the words flowed so well in your essay. Thank you for sharing! -- Mrs. Geib 